go
down, yes, down, to the seas
again
again
let
the tide
p u l l
you in
the
waves will br
eak
and smother
but
no one
will hear
the awful
din
go d
o
w
n
fill your
lungs
(with
salt)
start a
life out there
on the floor
take tea with the anemones
wish for laughter
but long for more
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'to the seas' is a poem that I wrote a few years ago for a writing task whilst studying my Creative Writing degree. We were tasked with writing a response to a poem - which is a good little exercise if you're looking to get into writing poetry. I picked Sea Fever by John Masefield, which is one of my favourites. My narrator is responding to the original, in all of its optimism and sentimentality about the restorative power of the sea, with a jaded look at the dangers that it also poses. I played with white space and used a lack of punctuation, to mimic the free-flowing waves, in order to explore how individually we manipulate and relate to our surroundings. I'm not crazy about it but sometimes it's nice to unearth older writing exercises to see where you've come from. If you liked this, why not read some more of my creative writing?
'to the seas' is a poem that I wrote a few years ago for a writing task whilst studying my Creative Writing degree. We were tasked with writing a response to a poem - which is a good little exercise if you're looking to get into writing poetry. I picked Sea Fever by John Masefield, which is one of my favourites. My narrator is responding to the original, in all of its optimism and sentimentality about the restorative power of the sea, with a jaded look at the dangers that it also poses. I played with white space and used a lack of punctuation, to mimic the free-flowing waves, in order to explore how individually we manipulate and relate to our surroundings. I'm not crazy about it but sometimes it's nice to unearth older writing exercises to see where you've come from. If you liked this, why not read some more of my creative writing?
I really really love this. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteSo pretty! I love "take tea with the anemones" <3
ReplyDeletethis is lovely x
ReplyDeletewhat a beautiful poem!
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